Dr. Patrick Ryan

Paper Instructions - CSI 2210f/g

2 ESSAYS - 55%

Please Submit your Papers using the OWL Site.

It is impractical to offer email consultations on your essays.  If you need assistance, please visit me during my office hours or speak to me after class.

Format and Style: All papers must be typed, double-spaced.  Please utilize footnotes using the Chicago/Turabian style.

You can access guidelines for Chicago/Turabian footnotes here.

A helpful online guided is at: https://owl.english.purdue.edu/owl/resource/717/02/

Consult this online, free version of Strunk & White, The Elements of Style for advice on the effective use of English.


PAPER 1: DUE Friday - Feb. 8, 2019 -- 25 %

Write a 3-page (900-word) essay responding to the following:

How do the discourses of modern childhood frame differences of opinion
about the types of rights children should possess?


PAPER 2: DUE Friday Mar. 29, 2019 -- 30 %
New Due Date: April 5, 2019

Write a 3-page (900-word) critical review of John Taylor Gatto's Weapons of Mass Instruction
For further details click here.



Essay Comment Abbreviations:

*These are the ways I have traditionally marked papers (with pen in hand), and will attempt to approximate this system when reading your electronic submissions.  I am currently learning how to operate in this environment, and hope to be able to returned edited, marked, e-copies to you.


SP = spelling error

WC = a questionable word choice; meaning obscure

WW = wrong word

GR = major grammatical problems with the sentences

RD = Redundancy needs to be removed

AWK = awkward sentence structure or phrase


LFW = Logic Flow Weak - links between sentences are unclear or weak - point obscured

TR = transitional sentences needed to link paragraphs or sentences

= new paragraph, or better paragraph organization, needed

No Block = shorten quotation or remove block quotation

Space = what are these extra spaces or margins doing here?

Arrows indicate the position or area of the text where the comment applies


Q or QU = the question you are supposed to be answering; usually refers to a departure from it

EV = evidence needed to support point

CITE = citation needed for evidence

NO = you have made a significant factual error

? or Huh = what do you mean?; don't get what you're saying

EXG = you have exaggerated the facts or you need to qualify this point

|| = good point

 = excellent point

Evaluation Chart



Handling the Question


Meaning & Analysis

Errors of fact or grammar


insightful and penetrating

nuanced and delicate

fulsome & convincing throughout

brilliant, creative, or ingenious

free of errors; gracefully written


clear and concise, well developed

complete command of the issue or assignment

relevant throughout

excellent logical flow, completely persuasive 

crisply written


clear and complete 

basic understanding of the issue or assignment

all major points supported

only minor weaknesses in logical flow or interpretation

clearly written with no major blunders

D & F

not entirely comprehensible, or failing to deal with issue

lacks basic understanding of the issue or assignment

lacks evidence for major parts of the thesis

major misinterpretations, shallow or illogical claims

blunders or incoherence