Dr. Patrick Ryan

Paper Instructions CSI 3360f/g

Format and Style: All papers must be typed, double-spaced.  Please utilize footnotes using the Chicago/Turabian style.

You can access guidelines for Chicago/Turabian footnotes here.

Consult this online, free version of Strunk & White, The Elements of Style for advice on the effective use of English.


PAPER 1: DUE OCT. 5 -- 15%

Write a 1-page (300-word) analysis of one of the texts (provided below) utilizing
the concepts and readings of this course upto and including Oct 2rd.


i. Milton Bradley TV Commercial,  "Numbers Up" (1981)

ii. UNICEF (Chile), "Right to Self Expression"  (2006)

iii. Rafael Casal "My Miller Chill" (Brave New Voices, 2008)

iv. New Project, UK, Rights and Responsibilities of Children (2013)

v. FUSE TV Commercial,   "Mountain Dew" (2014)

PAPER 2: DUE NOV. 16 -- 40%

Write a 5-page (1,500-word) analysis of a disciplinary technology
- in the Foucauldian sense -
that children or youth
commonly confront in Canadian institutions.

You must choose your own example of discipline or biopower
and indicate your choice to me via email by Nov. 9.

Answer these questions: 
i. what are the possible disciplinary effects of the technique?
ii. how do those effects structure generational relations?
iii. what does this expose about the discursive structure of childhood?

PAPER 3: DUE W DEC. 11 -- 30%

Write a 2-page (600-word) critical review of
Ian Hutchby's The Discourse of Child Counselling drawing (where appropriate)
on the key concepts and readings of the course.

For guidelines for critical reviews, click here.

Essay Comment Abbreviations:


SP = spelling error

WC = a questionable word choice; meaning obscure

WW = wrong word

GR = major grammatical problems with the sentences

RD = Redundancy needs to be removed

AWK = awkward sentence structure or phrase


LFW = Logic Flow Weak - links between sentences are unclear or weak - point obscured

TR = transitional sentences needed to link paragraphs or sentences

= new paragraph, or better paragraph organization, needed

No Block = shorten quotation or remove block quotation

Space = what are these extra spaces or margins doing here?

Arrows indicate the position or area of the text where the comment applies


Q or QU = the question you are supposed to be answering; usually refers to a departure from it

EV = evidence needed to support point

CITE = citation needed for evidence

NO = you have made a significant factual error

? or Huh = what do you mean?; don't get what you're saying

EXG = you have exaggerated the facts or you need to qualify this point

|| = good point

 = excellent point

Evaluation Chart



Handling the Question


Meaning & Analysis

Errors of fact or grammar


insightful and penetrating

nuanced and delicate

fulsome & convincing throughout

brilliant, creative, or ingenious

free of errors; gracefully written


clear and concise, well developed

complete command of the issue or assignment

relevant throughout

excellent logical flow, completely persuasive 

crisply written


clear and complete 

basic understanding of the issue or assignment

all major points supported

only minor weaknesses in logical flow or interpretation

clearly written with no major blunders

D & F

not entirely comprehensible, or failing to deal with issue

lacks basic understanding of the issue or assignment

lacks evidence for major parts of the thesis

major misinterpretations, shallow or illogical claims

blunders or incoherence